Alters screenplay

[dianneordi.livejournal.com]

I don't have MPD / DID, but I've had two close friends with DID and have known several others.

I'm currently working on a screenplay which I'm hoping will cast multiplicity in a favorable light, and would love to get some input.

The log line: A college student with multiple personalities must make a choice between the boy she loves and the alters who've kept her safe since childhood.

Although there's no explicit sex or violence, I've tried to be very straightforward, so there may be some triggers.

The screenplay can be downloaded it at www.fileden.com/files/2006/11/5/350846/Alters.pdf

Comments can be directed to dianneordi at excite dot com. Use "Alters" as the subject.

Thank you!
Dianne.

Comments

Better opening?

[dianneordi.livejournal.com]

OK, this would take the place of the opening, and remove any reference to abuse to the screenplay. Does it work?

Re: Better opening?

[rhymer-713.livejournal.com]

Yes!!!!!!!!!!! That's tons and tons better!!!!!!!! Thank you!!!!!!!!!! That's a lot like what happens here!!!!! Keep that opening. :-)Jess and Alissa who is pumping her fist in the air and doing war-whoops.

Re: Better opening?

[rhymer-713.livejournal.com]

email is rhymershouse777@yahoo.com

Re: Better opening?

[mirrorbrothers.livejournal.com]

Yes! Here we introduce the system as, (hallelujiah,) a normal life, which is really what the story's about. Better both politically and dramatically.

Re: Better opening?

[tempusfrangit.livejournal.com]

That's better, yes. That would truly compel me to read further. MUCH better.