Alters screenplay

[dianneordi.livejournal.com]

I don't have MPD / DID, but I've had two close friends with DID and have known several others.

I'm currently working on a screenplay which I'm hoping will cast multiplicity in a favorable light, and would love to get some input.

The log line: A college student with multiple personalities must make a choice between the boy she loves and the alters who've kept her safe since childhood.

Although there's no explicit sex or violence, I've tried to be very straightforward, so there may be some triggers.

The screenplay can be downloaded it at www.fileden.com/files/2006/11/5/350846/Alters.pdf

Comments can be directed to dianneordi at excite dot com. Use "Alters" as the subject.

Thank you!
Dianne.

Comments

Re: part 2

[dianneordi.livejournal.com]

That's actually what I was trying to show.

Re: part 2

[mirrorbrothers.livejournal.com]

Well, you didn't. If you wanted to show the integration becoming undone, you need to actually have plot events and dialogue where that happens. You can't just put the others on screen and call it implied, because there's this whole wrong theory about how everyone is still there as part of the post-integration person. And anyway, the audience assumption, sadly, is gonna be that integrated = fixed. So if you go straight from integrated Heather to happy ending, it's never going to occur to anyone that they re-split.

Re: part 2

[dianneordi.livejournal.com]

OK, I'll work on it.

clearer? (no integration)

[dianneordi.livejournal.com]

Does the new end of this scene work / make clear that Zoe, B.J., et al are back?

Re: clearer? (no integration)

[mirrorbrothers.livejournal.com]

Yeah, that's the stuff! Headmates to the rescue!