Alters screenplay

[dianneordi.livejournal.com]

I don't have MPD / DID, but I've had two close friends with DID and have known several others.

I'm currently working on a screenplay which I'm hoping will cast multiplicity in a favorable light, and would love to get some input.

The log line: A college student with multiple personalities must make a choice between the boy she loves and the alters who've kept her safe since childhood.

Although there's no explicit sex or violence, I've tried to be very straightforward, so there may be some triggers.

The screenplay can be downloaded it at www.fileden.com/files/2006/11/5/350846/Alters.pdf

Comments can be directed to dianneordi at excite dot com. Use "Alters" as the subject.

Thank you!
Dianne.

Comments

[socntonrers.livejournal.com]

I don't really like how it ends, if I'm to be believe what others have already said about it. I haven't finished it yet, but so far it doesn't seem to be that bad, and they seem like a pretty functional group. I'll finish it later today and see if I change my opinion *shrugs*

Still, why do they always have to integrate? I'm not really a multiple myself, but I can see why this would offend one(s?), and the word 'alters' was a bad choice. 'Plurally Inclined', as suggested above, would be a much better option.

[dianneordi.livejournal.com]

They don't integrate. I thought I made that clear at the end. Obviously not. I'll work on it.

[socntonrers.livejournal.com]

As I said, I haven't finished it myself and am just going by what others have said. Sorry if I misunderstood.

[socntonrers.livejournal.com]

I have officially finished reading the script. I think it's a huge improvement (though considering the previous material on plurals, anything is better), even if there are a few things that most people disagree with.

The whole integration/dormant thing is very unclear. Had you not told me directly, I would have assumed they integrated. This deffinately needs to be cleared up somehow.

Also... why can Heather suddenly not live with her headmates? This happens very suddenly and for almost no reason. If you're going to drive the story in this direction, the least you could do is flesh the dillemna out a little. Find a reason why this sudden change would occur. Multiples are just as functional as anyone else, and even if you're aiming for more of a dynsfunctional group, they'd have to, you know, be dysfunctional from the start. It just doesn't work out very well.

I will admit that I find the script a bit corny, though. Then again, I'm a bit biased since I hate romances like these anyway XD

[mirrorbrothers.livejournal.com]

I don't know what you meant to write, but they did in fact integrate. But if you meant they un-integrate later, that wasn't clear at all, no.

[dianneordi.livejournal.com]

Both my friends talked about their headmates being dormant -- they didn't integrate, they just weren't around (or at least, they weren't aware of them being around).

[mirrorbrothers.livejournal.com]

Oh, that, yes. That's what the doctors mean when they say "integration," most of the time, except they don't know that, because the ones who make a living on this subject haven't been, historically, very good doctors. I've done it, once when Rob was sick. I found it extremely unpleasant.