Alters screenplay

[dianneordi.livejournal.com]

I don't have MPD / DID, but I've had two close friends with DID and have known several others.

I'm currently working on a screenplay which I'm hoping will cast multiplicity in a favorable light, and would love to get some input.

The log line: A college student with multiple personalities must make a choice between the boy she loves and the alters who've kept her safe since childhood.

Although there's no explicit sex or violence, I've tried to be very straightforward, so there may be some triggers.

The screenplay can be downloaded it at www.fileden.com/files/2006/11/5/350846/Alters.pdf

Comments can be directed to dianneordi at excite dot com. Use "Alters" as the subject.

Thank you!
Dianne.

Comments

[mirrorbrothers.livejournal.com]

Technically, I told you that public skepticism about multiples was rude, and Rob told you your writing was crap. But yeah, we were tag teaming you and as of page 38 we owe you an apology. Can't speak for the plot until it's over, but your portrayal of the experience is great, and avoids a lot of common mistakes.

You should probably avoid emphasizing the word "alter," though. There's a dearth of words for headmates publicly recognizable enough to use on TV, but making it the title is a bit much.

[dianneordi.livejournal.com]

"There's a dearth of words for headmates publicly recognizable enough to use on TV"

What would you recommend?

[rhymer-713.livejournal.com]

"Headmates" "People" "People inside" Anything but alters. A great number of us find that term to be very, very offensive.
Rayvin

[mirrorbrothers.livejournal.com]

There probably isn't one. I mean, there's plenty of words, but nobody ut us knows them. You'd have to start with some longer phrase, and then introduce a better term in the show.