Alters screenplay

[dianneordi.livejournal.com]

I don't have MPD / DID, but I've had two close friends with DID and have known several others.

I'm currently working on a screenplay which I'm hoping will cast multiplicity in a favorable light, and would love to get some input.

The log line: A college student with multiple personalities must make a choice between the boy she loves and the alters who've kept her safe since childhood.

Although there's no explicit sex or violence, I've tried to be very straightforward, so there may be some triggers.

The screenplay can be downloaded it at www.fileden.com/files/2006/11/5/350846/Alters.pdf

Comments can be directed to dianneordi at excite dot com. Use "Alters" as the subject.

Thank you!
Dianne.

Comments

[gryphons.livejournal.com]

1) yes, we read it all the way through. Having her alters as the bridesmaids and the little as the flower girl.. we read that part.. and the fact that she said "we do".. considering it comes right after her talking about being alter free for 17 days.. and a very jumbled series of scenes.

2) you're stating that niki and jessica are Good portrayals of households? and norman bates and his mother are? Wow.. what do you think of your friends who are households if that's the examples you hold up as good portrayals?

[dianneordi.livejournal.com]

Actually, i'm saying that Nikki and Jessica is a cliche.

[gryphons.livejournal.com]

now that my family has had their say.. yes, Jessica and Nikki are a cliche.. a bad one..
You have made some good changes.. like taking out the introduction about the sexual abuse and hopefully filling in the areas where it's hinted at that she decides not to integrate, and instead live a life with her family both inside and out. Those are commendable and improve the screenplay a great deal. I hope that you will continue to work on these points.
-Liam