I'll play the vocal minorty and say that we (host and me, who read the story together) really liked it. The story was engaging and interesting, the characters likable (sometimes I wish we had a friend like Tyler!), and we liked how Heather's plurality was handled. So, all right, plurals usually don't see their alters (omg I said a bad word, quick, let's have a stoning :P) hanging around like you portrayed it in the script, but hey, artistic licence, anyone? I think doing it that way - having different people play the alters, and having them be there alongside the core or whatever you want to call it, is a lot less confusing to an audience than using just one actor who changes in voice and gestures every time Heather switches front.

As for the Julie subplot, that was a bit confusing at first, but we quickly figured it out :). I thought it was kind of interesting.

And we totally didn't read the ending as being "omg integration!!!". It was made pretty clear that the others are still around. *shrug*

Last but not least, thank you for portraying self-harm in a neutral light. The host and one of the others used to self-harm, and yes, it is a coping mechanism. Not a healthy one, not by far, but sometimes, it is better than not doing it.

- Malak